Group Project

1. Perceptions of Sex in America-Since the mid-twentieth century the average American citizen's perception of sex has changed drastically as is apparent in the amount of sexual material in the media. Even though this is the case many Americans are still very uncomfortable with themselves and their own sexuality. Why is this? Parents are scared to death of talking to their children about sex, if someone is in public sex hardly ever comes up with a serious tone. It is only used to be joked about, not to be seriously discussed.

At a Glance-Revising Your Draft

In my final draft more sources are needed to back up my thesis. To back up my thesis I will integrate more direct quotations and paraphrased source material into my essay. The analogies used were a little unclear to some of those who reviewed my paper. In order to give them more legitimacy the analogies will be developed a little more to make a more direct connection to my thesis. The conclusion needs to be more concise and clear as well. I did not exactly give a conclusion, instead I made another point. In my new conclusion a more in depth summary will be included and a more direct answer to the question posed by my thesis will be given. The main problem with my paper are formatting issues and sources. I will replenish my sources and entirely revise my format to make it MLA style. Part of this process will be making sure I have parenthetical citations for all outside information that is not already apparent to the reader.

The Dave Matthews Band Success Through the Years

I. The band's inconsistencies in the musical world
a. They are hardly ever heard on the radio, but still pack out concerts everywhere
b. They are paid hardly any media attention despite their success
c. The band has a fan base that has a wide age range (30 years)
d. The band has been around for almost 20 years, but remains just as popular

II. The band’s ability to avoid corporatism, but stay in the mainstream
a. They rely mostly on concerts, not radio hits.
b. At these concerts they have a tradition of allowing fans to plug recording devices in their speakers
c. They play eclectic, “non-pop” music that has roots in jazz, rock, folk, etc.
d. They go out and sell their music with their music

III. The band’s longevity
a. Classic rock honors old age, experience
b. Young pop singers make their money through the marketing of their youth, and attractiveness, which only lasts so long.
c. Their music has not gone out of style, because it is truly original in its nature, nobody.
d. They are always attracting older high school students and college students looking for a more mature sound than the melody driven pop of their youth. It will be much longer before most fans grow out of DMB’s music.
e. Dave Matthews Band does not have to worry about their “look” because that is not something they rely on to market their music. For this reason they don’t have to worry about fashion of any kind.

IV. The reasons behind band’s diverse audience
a. Dave’s unique and inspired vocals
b. The band’s mixture of many different music styles.
c. Their outstanding outdoor performances
d. An older generation might be attracted by the bands rendition of many older classics from a variety of artists